Evaluating a Job-Application Letter

The following application letter responds to an ad describing this position: “Buyer for a high-fashion ladies’ dress shop. Experience required.” In a brief memo to your instructor, describe how effective the letter is and how it could be improved.

April 13, 2016

Marilyn Grissert

Best Department Store

113 Hawthorn

Atlanta, Georgia

Dear Ms. Grissert:

As I was reading the Sunday Examiner, I came upon your ad for a buyer. I have always been interested in learning about the South, so would you consider my application?

I will receive my degree in fashion design in one month. I have taken many courses in fashion design, so I feel I have a strong background in the field.

Also, I have had extensive experience in retail work. For two summers I sold women’s accessories at a local clothing store. In addition, I was a temporary department head for two weeks.

I have enclosed a résumé and would like to interview you at your convenience. I hope to see you in the near future. My phone number is 555-6103.

Sincerely,

Brenda Sisneros