EXERCISE 15–3 Sentence variety

EXERCISE 15–3 Sentence variety

Examine the draft and the revision of each sentence. Identify the technique that was used to improve sentence variety. Click Save to save your work and return to it. Click Submit to see your score and item-by-item explanations; your activity will be recorded in your instructor's gradebook.

Example

1 of 5

Draft: The Dust Bowl farmers, looking wearily into the cameras of US government photographers, represented the harshest effects of the Great Depression.

Revision: Looking wearily into the cameras of US government photographers, the Dust Bowl farmers represented the harshest effects of the Great Depression.

Question

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EXERCISE 15–3 Sentence variety - 1 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

2 of 5

Draft: The Trans Alaska Pipeline was completed in 1977. It has moved more than fifteen billion barrels of oil since 1977.

Revision: Since it was completed in 1977, the Trans Alaska Pipeline has moved more than fifteen billion barrels of oil.

Question

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EXERCISE 15–3 Sentence variety - 2 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

3 of 5

Draft: Mr. Guo habitually dresses in loose clothing and canvas shoes for his wushu workout.

Revision: Habitually, Mr. Guo dresses in loose clothing and canvas shoes for his wushu workout.

Question

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EXERCISE 15–3 Sentence variety - 3 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

4 of 5

Draft: A number of obstacles are strategically placed throughout a firefighter training maze.

Revision: Strategically placed throughout a firefighter training maze are a number of obstacles.

Question

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EXERCISE 15–3 Sentence variety - 4 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

5 of 5

Draft: Ian McKellen is a British actor who made his debut in 1961 and was knighted in 1991, and he played Gandalf in the movie trilogy The Lord of the Rings.

Revision: Ian McKellen, a British actor, made his debut in 1961, was knighted in 1991, and played Gandalf in the movie trilogy The Lord of the Rings.

Question

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EXERCISE 15–3 Sentence variety - 5 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?