EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences

EXERCISE 16–7Wordy sentences

Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. When you have finished, click on Submit both to check and to record your answer. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.

Example

1 of 10

On June 26, 2000, two groups of scientists announced a breakthrough in the science of genetics.

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On June 26, 2000, two groups of scientists announced a breakthrough in genetics. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 1 of 10: On June 26, 2000, two groups of scientists announced a breakthrough in the science of genetics.

2 of 10

The scientists, representing teams from organizations that are known as the Human Genome Project and Celera Genomics, had deciphered the human genome.

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The scientists, representing teams from the Human Genome Project and Celera Genomics, had deciphered the human genome. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 2 of 10: The scientists, representing teams from organizations that are known as the Human Genome Project and Celera Genomics, had deciphered the human genome.

3 of 10

Every individual person inherits from each of his or her parents half of a genome, a set of instructions defining a human being.

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Every person inherits from each parent half of a genome, a set of instructions defining a human being. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 3 of 10: Every individual person inherits from each of his or her parents half of a genome, a set of instructions defining a human being.

4 of 10

The publicly funded Human Genome Project originally began a genome map in 1990.

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The publicly funded Human Genome Project began a genome map in 1990. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 4 of 10: The publicly funded Human Genome Project originally began a genome map in 1990.

5 of 10

In 1998, scientists at Celera Genomics, a private corporation, began racing the Human Genome Project team in a competition to see who could finish the genome map first.

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In 1998, scientists at Celera Genomics, a private corporation, began racing the Human Genome Project team to see who could finish the genome map first. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 5 of 10: In 1998, scientists at Celera Genomics, a private corporation, began racing the Human Genome Project team in a competition to see who could finish the genome map first.

6 of 10

When each group had finished part of the map, the scientists combined the pieces together, completing the genome.

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When each group had finished part of the map, the scientists combined the pieces, completing the genome. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 6 of 10: When each group had finished part of the map, the scientists combined the pieces together, completing the genome.

7 of 10

There are many gains that scientists expect from the genome breakthrough.

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Scientists expect many gains from the genome breakthrough. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 7 of 10: There are many gains that scientists expect from the genome breakthrough.

8 of 10

Genetic information will provide benefits for people at risk of developing genetic diseases.

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Genetic information will benefit people at risk of developing genetic diseases. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 8 of 10: Genetic information will provide benefits for people at risk of developing genetic diseases.

9 of 10

The genome map may help biologists learn how specific genes have an effect on the body.

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The genome map may help biologists learn how specific genes affect the body. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 9 of 10: The genome map may help biologists learn how specific genes have an effect on the body.

10 of 10

There are many details that still need to be added to the genome map, but the completed outline is cause for celebration.

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Many details still need to be added to the genome map, but the completed outline is cause for celebration. For more help, see section 16.
EXERCISE 16–7 Wordy sentences - 10 of 10: There are many details that still need to be added to the genome map, but the completed outline is cause for celebration.