EXERCISE 2–1 Conducting a peer review

EXERCISE 2–1Conducting a peer review

In each pair, click on the response from a peer reviewer that is more likely to help the writer revise his or her draft.

1 of 5

Question

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EXERCISE 2and#8211;1 Conducting a peer review - 1 of 5: Here are two reviewer comments on a studentand#8217;s first draft of an essay about the voyage of the Titanic. Which comment is more appropriate and helpful at the draft stage of the writing process?

2 of 5

Question

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EXERCISE 2and#8211;1 Conducting a peer review - 2 of 5: A student revised her first draft to include more examples. Which peer response to her second draft would better help her write the final draft?

3 of 5

Question

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EXERCISE 2and#8211;1 Conducting a peer review - 3 of 5: A student asked for input on a first draft of her essay arguing against the teaching of creationism in schools. Which response would help her strengthen her argument?

4 of 5

Question

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EXERCISE 2and#8211;1 Conducting a peer review - 4 of 5: Here are peer responses to a studentand#8217;s first draft of a research paper on efforts to slow the spread of AIDS in the United States. Which response would be more likely to help the student write a compelling second draft?

5 of 5

Question

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EXERCISE 2and#8211;1 Conducting a peer review - 5 of 5: A student asked his peer reviewers to pay special attention to the flow of his first draft of a paper based on an interview with a Chesapeake Bay waterman. Which reviewer response would be more helpful to the writer?