Exercise 29.5 Revising to make language concrete

Rewrite each of the following sentences to be more specific and concrete.

  1. The entryway of the building was dirty.

    Question

    The entryway of the building was dirty.
    The entryway of the building was dirty.
  2. The sounds at dawn are memorable.

    Question

    The sounds at dawn are memorable.
    The sounds at dawn are memorable.
  3. Our holiday dinner tasted good.

    Question

    Our holiday dinner tasted good.
    Our holiday dinner tasted good.
  4. The attendant came toward my car.

    Question

    The attendant came toward my car.
    The attendant came toward my car.
  5. I woke up.

    Question

    I woke up.
    I woke up.