EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts

EXERCISE 5–5Editing for shifts

Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.

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A new neighbor often forms lasting impressions of their neighborhood based on the way they were treated when they first moved in.

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New neighbors often form lasting impressions of their neighborhood based on the way they were treated when they first moved in. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: A new neighbor often forms lasting impressions of their neighborhood based on the way they were treated when they first moved in.

2 of 10

In the film Ironman, Robert Downey Jr. plays an eccentric billionaire whose life is drastically changed when a bomb almost killed him and he was captured by terrorists.

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In the film Ironman, Robert Downey Jr. plays an eccentric billionaire whose life is drastically changed when a bomb almost kills him and he is captured by terrorists. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: In the film Ironman, Robert Downey Jr. plays an eccentric billionaire whose life is drastically changed when a bomb almost killed him and he was captured by terrorists.

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As we pulled out of the driveway, my father yelled at us to be careful and don’t drive over fifty-five!

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As we pulled out of the driveway, my father yelled at us, “Be careful, and don’t drive over fifty-five!”orAs we pulled out of the driveway, my father yelled at us to be careful and not to drive over fifty-five. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: As we pulled out of the driveway, my father yelled at us to be careful and don’t drive over fifty-five!

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An interior designer usually interviews homeowners to formulate an overall plan for a house. For example, a designer might ask the owners what their favorite colors are and do they enjoy cooking big meals.

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An interior designer usually interviews homeowners to formulate an overall plan for a house. For example, a designer might ask the owners what their favorite colors are and whether they enjoy cooking big meals. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: An interior designer usually interviews homeowners to formulate an overall plan for a house. For example, a designer might ask the owners what their favorite colors are and do they enjoy cooking big meals.

5 of 10

Our elementary school principal expected absolute obedience; he taught you to obey all rules without question.

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Our elementary school principal expected absolute obedience; he taught us to obey all rules without question. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: Our elementary school principal expected absolute obedience; he taught you to obey all rules without question.

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When my mother went to college, her research papers were written on typewriters, not computers.

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When my mother went to college, she wrote her research papers on typewriters, not computers. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: When my mother went to college, her research papers were written on typewriters, not computers.

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We were sitting on the stoop, eating takeout burgers and talking, and no one was doing anything illegal. Suddenly, a patrol car cruises by, and four officers jump out and come toward us.

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We were sitting on the stoop, eating takeout burgers and talking, and no one was doing anything illegal. Suddenly, a patrol car cruised by, and four officers jumped out and came toward us. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: We were sitting on the stoop, eating takeout burgers and talking, and no one was doing anything illegal. Suddenly, a patrol car cruises by, and four officers jump out and come toward us.

8 of 10

A standardized test is supposed to measure a student’s knowledge and ability. However, the main thing they measure is how well a student takes standardized tests.

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Standardized tests are supposed to measure a student’s knowledge and ability. However, the main thing they measure is how well a student takes standardized tests.orA standardized test is supposed to measure a student’s knowledge and ability. However, the main thing it measures is how well a student takes a standardized test. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: A standardized test is supposed to measure a student’s knowledge and ability. However, the main thing they measure is how well a student takes standardized tests.

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A woman with a loudspeaker urged us to contact our local representatives about the dangers of global climate change. Also, get involved in other political issues.

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A woman with a loudspeaker urged us to contact our local representatives about the dangers of global climate change and to get involved in other political issues. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: A woman with a loudspeaker urged us to contact our local representatives about the dangers of global climate change. Also, get involved in other political issues.

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After waiting for three hours to apply for my driver’s license, I finally reached the front of the line. You could see the indifference in the clerk’s face as he told me to come back the following day with proper identification.

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After waiting for three hours to apply for my driver’s license, I finally reached the front of the line. I could see the indifference in the clerk’s face as he told me to come back the following day with proper identification. For more help, see section 5.
EXERCISE 5–5 Editing for shifts - Edit the sentence or sentences to eliminate distracting shifts. Answers may vary.: After waiting for three hours to apply for my driver’s license, I finally reached the front of the line. You could see the indifference in the clerk’s face as he told me to come back the following day with proper identification.