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The following student essay includes all the elements of a definition argument. The student who wrote this essay is trying to convince his university that he is a nontraditional student and is therefore entitled to the benefits such students receive.
WHY I AM A NONTRADITIONAL STUDENT
ADAM KENNEDY
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Thesis statement
Ever since I started college, I have had difficulty getting the extra help I need to succeed. My final disappointment came last week when my adviser told me that I could not take advantage of the programs the school offers to nontraditional students. She told me that because I am not old enough, I simply do not qualify. This is confusing to me because I am anything but a “traditional” student. In fact, I am one of the most nontraditional students I know. In spite of my age—
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Evidence: Operational definition of nontraditional student
According to researchers, the term nontraditional student is difficult to define. Studies show that a broad operational definition that acknowledges many factors is preferable to one that focuses on age alone. For example, the National Center for Educational Statistics bases its definition on whether or not a student has any of the following seven characteristics:
Did not enter college right after high school
Is a part-
Does not depend on parents for money
Has a full-
Has children or a spouse
Is a single parent
Has a GED instead of a high school diploma (Kim et al. 405–
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Evidence: Other schools’ definitions of nontraditional student
Many colleges use similar, or even broader, criteria to define nontraditional student. For example, the University of Arkansas provides special services for older students as well as for students with other work-
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Evidence: Our school’s definition of nontraditional student
According to the criteria from the National Center for Educational Statistics (listed above), I would have no problem qualifying as a nontraditional student at the University of Arkansas. Our school, however, has a much narrower definition of the term. When I went to Non-
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Evidence: How writer fits the definition of nontraditional student
By any measure, I am not a “traditional student.” After getting married at seventeen, I dropped out of high school and got a full-
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Refutation of opposing argument
I can see how someone could say that I am too young to be considered a nontraditional student. However, I believe that my life experiences should qualify me for this program. My marriage and divorce, time in the army, and reentry issues make me very different from the average first-
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Concluding statement
The university should expand the definition of nontraditional to include younger students who have followed unconventional career paths and have postponed college. Even though these students may be younger than twenty-
Works Cited
Kim, Karen A., et al. “Redefining Nontraditional Students: Exploring the Self-
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Avoiding Is Where and Is When
In a formal definition, you may find yourself using the phrase is where or is when. If so, your definition is incomplete because it omits the term’s class. The use of is where or is when signals that you are giving an example of the term, not a definition. You can avoid this problem by making sure that the verb be in your definition is always followed by a noun.
INCORRECT | The university website says that a nontraditional student is when you live off campus, commute from home, have children, are a veteran, or are over the age of twenty- |
CORRECT | The university website says that a nontraditional student is someone who lives off campus, commutes from home, has children, is a veteran, or is over the age of twenty- |