Writing a Thesis That You Can Show, Explain, or Prove

If a thesis is so obvious that it does not need support or if it states a known fact, you will not be able to say much about it.

OBVIOUS Most teenagers drive.
REVISED The high accident rates among new teen drivers could be reduced with better and more extended driver training.
FACT A growing number of American children are overweight.
REVISED We must, as a nation, act to reduce obesity in our children.