EXERCISE 20–9Revising run-on sentences

If the sentence is a run-on, revise it using a technique that you find effective. If the sentence is correct, do not change it. Answers may vary.

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The presence of a small number of white blood cells in the blood is normal, a high concentration of white cells may be cause for concern.

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The Chevy Chase swimmers were determined to win this medley relay for one reason, it was their last chance to beat their rivals from Kensington.

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My business is very competitive, therefore I need to continue my education.

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After the publication of his novel A Catcher in the Rye, J. D. Salinger became reclusive and eventually stopped publishing.

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The A team outfielders shared six pizzas they drowned their sorrows in several pitchers of root beer.

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The polar bear has evolved over millions of years to live and hunt almost exclusively on frozen sea water, however, global warming, which has led to the melting of sea ice, has threatened the bear’s continued existence.

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When I arrived at the pool, I was immediately put to work cleaning two very large bathrooms, my colleagues worked on the pool itself.

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Katharine Hepburn garnered more Academy Awards than any other film star has ever received she won the Oscar for best actress four times.

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At the age of sixty-five, with only $105 from his first Social Security check, Harland David “Colonel” Sanders began to sell his secret Kentucky Fried Chicken recipe to franchises nationwide, when he was seventy-four, Sanders sold his company to a group of investors for $2 million.

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Why should we donate money to your charity, according to the newspaper, only 50 percent of the funds you solicit reach people in need.

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