Read “Latrisha Wilson’s First Draft Paragraph” and answer the following questions. Then “submit” your work.
1. Topic Sentence Identify Wilson’s topic sentence. How did she strengthen it in her revision?
2. Details What irrelevant details did she delete?
3. Transitions What transitions did she add to provide coherence?
4 Repetition What words are repeated, thus contributing to coherence?
5. Further Revision What further revisions do you recommend?