Chapter 14, Additional Exercise 4: Revising Letters

1. To a laboratory-equipment supplier:

   Gentlemen:

   Would you please send us the following items:

   one dozen petri dishes

   one gross pyrex test tubes

   three bunsen burners

   Please bill us.

   Sincerely,

2. To the admissions department of a law school:

   Gentlemen:

   I am a senior considering going to law school. Would you please answer the following questions about your law school:

   How well do your graduates do?

   Is the LSAT required?

   Do you have any electives, or are all the courses required?

   Are computer skills required for admission?

   A swift reply would be appreciated. Thank you.

   Sincerely yours,

3. From a supplier of home alarm systems:

   Dear Smith Family:

   A rose is a rose is a rose, the poet said. But not all home protection alarms are alike. In a time when burglaries are skyrocketing, can you afford the second-best alarm system?

   Your home is your most valuable possession. It is worth far more than your car. And if you haven't checked your house insurance policy recently, you'll probably be shocked to see how inadequate your coverage really is.

   The best kind of insurance you can buy is the Watchdog Alarm System. What makes the Watchdog unique is that it can detect intruders before they enter your home and scare them away. Scaring them away while they're still outside is certainly better than scaring them once they're inside, where your loved ones are.

   At less than two hundred dollars, you can purchase real peace of mind. Isn't your family's safety worth that much?

   If you answered yes to that question, just mail in the enclosed postage-paid card, and we'll send you a 12-page, fact-filled brochure that tells you why the Watchdog is the best on the market.

   Very truly yours,