28e Rewrite one independent clause as a dependent clause.

28e
Rewrite one independent clause as a dependent clause.

When one independent clause is more important than the other, try converting the less important one to a dependent clause by adding an appropriate subordinating conjunction.

COMMA SPLICE image

In the revision, the writer emphasizes the second clause and makes the first one into a dependent clause by adding the subordinating conjunction although.

FUSED SENTENCE image

In the revision, the writer chooses to emphasize the first clause (the one describing what the movement advocated) and make the second clause into a dependent clause.