W2 Wordy sentences

EXERCISE W2–6 Wordy sentences

EXERCISE W2-6Wordy sentences

Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.

Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.)

Example

1 of 10

By the seventh century, the Greeks’ medical writings might have vanished entirely.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

By the seventh century, the Greeks’ medical writings might have vanished. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: By the seventh century, the Greeks’ medical writings might have vanished entirely.

2 of 10

Luckily, Islamic scholars decided that these writings were worth the trouble of preserving.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

Luckily, Islamic scholars decided that these writings were worth preserving. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: Luckily, Islamic scholars decided that these writings were worth the trouble of preserving.

3 of 10

Ninth-century caliphs of Baghdad actually took it upon themselves to establish a translation center where Greek scientific manuscripts were translated into Arabic.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

Ninth-century caliphs of Baghdad established a center where Greek scientific manuscripts were translated into Arabic. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: Ninth-century caliphs of Baghdad actually took it upon themselves to establish a translation center where Greek scientific manuscripts were translated into Arabic.

4 of 10

Just simply keeping these manuscripts in use and ascertaining that copies were available would have been a remarkable achievement for the medieval Islamic world.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

Simply keeping these manuscripts in use and making copies available would have been a remarkable achievement for the medieval Islamic world. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: Just simply keeping these manuscripts in use and ascertaining that copies were available would have been a remarkable achievement for the medieval Islamic world.

5 of 10

But Arab scholars were not content just to study and contemplate information that had already been discovered.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

But Arab scholars were not content just to study information that had already been discovered. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: But Arab scholars were not content just to study and contemplate information that had already been discovered.

6 of 10

Arab thinkers of the ninth, tenth, and eleventh centuries made many original contributions to the field of medical science.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

Arab thinkers of the ninth, tenth, and eleventh centuries made many original contributions to medical science. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: Arab thinkers of the ninth, tenth, and eleventh centuries made many original contributions to the field of medical science.

7 of 10

Al-Razi, a man known to Westerners as Rhazes, succeeded in treating patients suffering from such diseases as scabies, measles, and kidney infections.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

Al-Razi, known to Westerners as Rhazes, successfully treated patients suffering from such diseases as scabies, measles, and kidney infections. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: Al-Razi, a man known to Westerners as Rhazes, succeeded in treating patients suffering from such diseases as scabies, measles, and kidney infections.

8 of 10

Ibn Sina, who was a physician whose name is known in the West as Avicenna, was perhaps the greatest of all the medieval Arab physicians.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

Ibn Sina, known in the West as Avicenna, was perhaps the greatest medieval Arab physician. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: Ibn Sina, who was a physician whose name is known in the West as Avicenna, was perhaps the greatest of all the medieval Arab physicians.

9 of 10

His book Canon of Medicine was a publication that was still being consulted by doctors in the nineteenth century.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

His book Canon of Medicine was still being consulted by doctors in the nineteenth century. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: His book Canon of Medicine was a publication that was still being consulted by doctors in the nineteenth century.

10 of 10

Modern patients today have many reasons to feel that they owe a debt of gratitude to these medieval Islamic scholars.

Possible revision:

Question

k+V5p+tRVhC6ZQpJ580/ahyJNPw=

Patients today have many reasons to be grateful to these medieval Islamic scholars. For more help, see section W2.

EXERCISE W2-6 Wordy sentences - Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken. Answers may vary.: Modern patients today have many reasons to feel that they owe a debt of gratitude to these medieval Islamic scholars.