EXERCISE W2-2Wordy sentences
In the text box below, edit the following business memo to reduce wordiness.
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To: | District managers |
From: | Margaret Davenport, Vice President |
Subject: | Customer database |
It has recently been brought to my attention that a percentage of our sales representatives have been failing to log reports of their client calls in our customer database each and every day. I have also learned that some representatives are not checking the database on a routine basis.
Our clients sometimes receive a multiple number of sales calls from us when a sales representative is not cognizant of the fact that the client has been contacted at a previous time. Repeated telephone calls from our representatives annoy our customers. These repeated telephone calls also portray our company as one that is lacking in organization.
Effective as of immediately, direct your representatives to do the following:
Let me extend my appreciation to you for cooperating in this important matter.
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