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Exercise W2-6
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The sentences in this exercise are all taken from one paragraph about ancient Greek medicine. The following is the first sentence in the paragraph: "Did you know that the ancient Greeks wrote about medicine?" Correct the other sentences, below, to eliminate wordiness. Answers may vary.

Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.)

Example

1 of 10

By the seventh century, the Greeks’ medical writings might have vanished entirely.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: By the seventh century, the Greeks’ medical writings might have vanished.
For more help, see section W2.

2 of 10

Luckily, Islamic scholars decided that these writings were worth the trouble of preserving.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: Luckily, Islamic scholars decided that these writings were worth preserving.
For more help, see section W2.

3 of 10

Ninth-century caliphs of Baghdad actually took it upon themselves to establish a translation center where Greek scientific manuscripts were translated into Arabic.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: Ninth-century caliphs of Baghdad established a center where Greek scientific manuscripts were translated into Arabic.
For more help, see section W2.

4 of 10

Just simply keeping these manuscripts in use and ascertaining that copies were available would have been a remarkable achievement for the medieval Islamic world.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: Simply keeping these manuscripts in use and making copies available would have been a remarkable achievement for the medieval Islamic world.
For more help, see section W2.

5 of 10

But Arab scholars were not content just to study and contemplate information that had already been discovered.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: But Arab scholars were not content just to study information that had already been discovered.
For more help, see section W2.

6 of 10

Arab thinkers of the ninth, tenth, and eleventh centuries made many original contributions to the field of medical science.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: Arab thinkers of the ninth, tenth, and eleventh centuries made many original contributions to medical science.
For more help, see section W2.

7 of 10

Al-Razi, a man known to Westerners as Rhazes, succeeded in treating patients suffering from such diseases as scabies, measles, and kidney infections.

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Suggested revision: Al-Razi, known to Westerners as Rhazes, successfully treated patients suffering from such diseases as scabies, measles, and kidney infections.
For more help, see section W2.

8 of 10

Ibn Sina, who was a physician whose name is known in the West as Avicenna, was perhaps the greatest of all the medieval Arab physicians.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: Ibn Sina, known in the West as Avicenna, was perhaps the greatest medieval Arab physician.
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9 of 10

His book Canon of Medicine was a publication that was still being consulted by doctors in the nineteenth century.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: His book Canon of Medicine was still being consulted by doctors in the nineteenth century.
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10 of 10

Modern patients today have many reasons to feel that they owe a debt of gratitude to these medieval Islamic scholars.

Possible revision:
Suggested revision: Patients today have many reasons to be grateful to these medieval Islamic scholars.
For more help, see section W2.