In each pair, click on the passage that is more effective, given the writer’s purpose and audience.
For help with this exercise, see Purpose and audience.
Example
1 of 10
◯ | The hamburgers that are sold in the vending machines are dry in texture. They are also cold to the taste. |
◯ | When I turned to the machine, I decided to try a sizzling hamburger, lean and juicy. Instead, out came a small dry patty so cold that the fat was congealed in tiny globs on top of the meat. |
2 of 10
◯ | After the machine stops, move the control lever to the reverse position. |
◯ | Move the control lever to the reverse position after the machine stops. |
3 of 10
◯ | During the performance, make sure all cell phones, beepers, and watch alarms are OFF. And don’t jangle the bangles. |
◯ | In an effort to behave in a civilized fashion, please turn off all cell phones, beepers, and watch alarms during the performance. In addition, don’t let your bracelets clank together. |
4 of 10
◯ | English 235, Asian Literature, offers students a multicultural experience, helping them move beyond their stereotypes about the “inscrutable” men and women of the East. |
◯ | If you can’t face Julius Caesar or The Scarlet Letter one more time and are looking for a course that will help you get to know the people who inhabit the other side of our shrinking planet Earth, then English 235, Asian Literature, is for you. |
5 of 10
◯ | We have revitalized our company with new marketing strategies, a forward-looking management team, and a wider base of clients. |
◯ | At this point in time, ours is a revitalized company no longer attached to outmoded marketing concepts, subject to in-house managerial conflicts, or dependent on government clients. |
6 of 10
◯ | Getting rid of unsightly, unhealthy extra pounds is impossible if you stuff yourself and avoid exercise. If you don’t choose to diet, you are headed for a miserable life and perhaps even an early grave. |
◯ | Unfortunately, there is no magic pill that can make you lose weight and keep it off. The best way to tackle the problem is to eat nutritious foods in moderation and to get regular exercise. You’ll live longer, and you’ll enjoy your life more. Talk to your doctor about the foods and exercise that are right for you. |
7 of 10
◯ | Between 1980 and 1990, much of the aquatic life died out downstream from the Megalocorp plant, where many tons of raw sewage entered the river. |
◯ | Between 1980 and 1990, the Megalocorp plant released into the river many tons of raw sewage, which killed off much of the aquatic life downstream. |
8 of 10
◯ | No one expected the 2000 US presidential contest to end with the Supreme Court declaring George W. Bush the winner, although polls on Election Day showed that the race would be close. |
◯ | Although polls on Election Day showed that the race would be close, no one expected the 2000 US presidential contest to end with the Supreme Court declaring George W. Bush the winner. |
9 of 10
◯ | Because of requests from residents seeking information about an HMO plan, whereby you receive free medical care, certain dental work, and low-cost prescriptions, your board of directors has arranged to have an HMO representative come to the clubhouse at 7:00 p.m. on Wednesday, August 10, to describe the plan. There will be a question-and-answer period, with refreshments. |
◯ | HMO medical plan to be explainedWhere: At the clubhouseWhen: Tuesday, August 10, 7:00 p.mIn a half-hour talk, an HMO representative will describe these benefits1. free medical care2. certain dental work3. low-cost prescriptionsRefreshments and a question-and-answer period will follow. |
10 of 10
◯ | Dear Professor Blake,At the risk of inconveniencing you, I must confess that the volleyball team of which I am a member has a critical match on the day our next paper is due. I apologize for this conflict. What do you advise I should do about this situation?Sincerely yours,Jane Smith |
◯ | Dear Professor Blake,I am in your English 205 class (section 3220), and our next paper is due on Friday, March 19. Because I have an important out-of-town volleyball match that day, I would like to request an extension until Monday, March 22. Would this be acceptable to you?Thanks,Jane Smith |