The comment: Narrow your introduction
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- Unfocused intro
- Too broad
Understanding the comment
When readers point out that your introduction needs to be “narrowed,” the comment often signals that the beginning sentences of your essay are not specific or focused.
Strategies for revising
- Reread your introduction and ask questions. Are the sentences leading to your thesis specific enough to engage readers and communicate your purpose? Do these sentences lead logically to your thesis? Do they spark your readers’ curiosity and offer them a reason to continue reading?
- Try engaging readers with a “hook” in your introduction—a question, a quotation, a paradoxical statement, a vivid example, or an image.
Related topics:
Drafting an introduction
Strategies for writing an introduction
Writing an introduction
Providing a hook in your introduction