Conclusion: Argument paper

Annotated paragraph: Unless we are willing to organize separate sporting events and leagues--an Olympics, say, for athletes who have opted for a boost from the test tube and another for athletes who have chosen to keep their bodies natural--we should ask from our athletes that they dazzle us less with extraordinary performance and more with the fruits of their hard work. —Jamal Hammond, student. The paragraph inlcudes the following annotations to demonstrate why this conclusion is effective: Conclusion repeats details and images from body of essay. Restates the thesis while proposing a course of action. Uses elegant parallel phrasing ("we should ask from our athletes that they dazzle us less with extraordinary performance and more with the fruits of their hard work") to sound note of conclusion.

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