Editing to avoid redundancy

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Redundant expressions such as cooperate together, close proximity, basic essentials, and true fact are a common source of wordiness. There is no need to say the same thing twice.

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Though modifiers ordinarily add meaning to the words they modify, occasionally they are redundant.

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The words scribbled and determined already contain the notions suggested by the modifiers very hurriedly and in his mind.

See if you can spot redundancy in the following sentences and revise them to be more concise without loss of meaning.

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Possible revision: When the whistle blew to end regulation, the score was Commanders 3 and Isotopes 2. [Signal is unnecessary following whistle blew; final is redundant with end; on the scoreboard is unnecessary following score.]

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Possible revision: At sundown, orange and pink flames brightened the sky. [Sky over our heads is redundant (the sky is always overhead).]

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Possible revision: Researchers Williams and Hurt reported that women were more likely than men to prefer assistance from a salesperson. [The authors of the research report can be said more concisely as Researchers; in their study is redundant with research report and with reported.]

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