Editing to avoid redundancy

Redundant expressions such as cooperate together, close proximity, basic essentials, and true fact are a common source of wordiness. There is no need to say the same thing twice.

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Though modifiers ordinarily add meaning to the words they modify, occasionally they are redundant.

The words scribbled and determined already contain the notions suggested by the modifiers very hurriedly and in his mind.

See if you can spot redundancy in the following sentences and revise them to be more concise without loss of meaning.

Question 1 of 3

1. When the whistle blew to signal the end of regulation play, the final score on the scoreboard was Commanders 3 and Isotopes 2.

Question 2 of 3

2. At sundown, orange and pink flames brightened the sky over our heads.

Question 3 of 3

3. The authors of the research report, Williams and Hurt, reported in their study that women were more likely than men to prefer assistance from a salesperson.

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