The comment: Develop more
C-69
Similar comments
- Undeveloped
- Give examples
- Explain
Understanding the comment
When readers suggest that you “develop more,” the comment often signals that you stopped short of providing a full and detailed discussion of your idea.
Strategies for revising
- Read your paragraph to a peer or a tutor and ask specific questions. What’s missing? Do readers need more background information or examples to understand your point? Do they need more evidence to be convinced? Is it clear what point you’re making with your details?
- Keep your purpose in mind. Your assignment probably asks you to do more than summarize sources or list examples and evidence. Make sure you discuss the examples and illustrations you provide and analyze your evidence.
- Think about why your main point matters to your readers. Take another look at your points and support and answer the “So what?” question.
Related topics:
Backing up the thesis with lines of argument
Supporting claims with evidence
Testing a working thesis statement