26a Revise faulty sentence structure.

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One inconsistency that poses problems for writers and readers is a mixed structure, which results from beginning a sentence with one grammatical pattern and then switching to another one.

MIXED The fact that I get up at 5:00 am, a wake-up time that explains why I’m always tired in the evening.

The sentence starts out with a subject (The fact) followed by a dependent clause (that I get up at 5:00 am). The sentence needs a predicate to complete the independent clause, but instead it moves to another phrase followed by a dependent clause (a wake-up time that explains why I’m always tired in the evening), and what results is a fragment.

REVISED The fact that I get up at 5:00 am explains why I’m always tired in the evening.

Deleting a wake-up time that changes the rest of the sentence into a predicate.

REVISED I get up at 5:00 am, a wake-up time that explains why I’m always tired in the evening.

Deleting The fact that turns the beginning of the sentence into an independent clause.

(For information about subjects and predicates, see 31j and k; for information about independent and dependent clauses, see 31m.)