Wordy sentences 4

Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken.

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By the seventh century, the Greeks’ medical writings might have vanished entirely.

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By the seventh century, the Greeks’ medical writings might have vanished.
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Luckily, Islamic scholars decided that these writings were worth the trouble of preserving.

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Luckily, Islamic scholars decided that these writings were worth preserving.
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Ninth-century caliphs of Baghdad actually took it upon themselves to establish a translation center where Greek scientific manuscripts were translated into Arabic.

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Ninth-century caliphs of Baghdad established a center where Greek scientific manuscripts were translated into Arabic.
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Just simply keeping these manuscripts in use and ascertaining that copies were available would have been a remarkable achievement for the medieval Islamic world.

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Simply keeping these manuscripts in use and making copies available would have been a remarkable achievement for the medieval Islamic world.
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But Arab scholars were not content just to study and contemplate information that had already been discovered.

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But Arab scholars were not content just to study information that had already been discovered.
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Arab thinkers of the ninth, tenth, and eleventh centuries made many original contributions to the field of medical science.

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Arab thinkers of the ninth, tenth, and eleventh centuries made many original contributions to medical science.
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Al-Razi, a man known to Westerners as Rhazes, succeeded in treating patients suffering from such diseases as scabies, measles, and kidney infections.

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Al-Razi, known to Westerners as Rhazes, successfully treated patients suffering from such diseases as scabies, measles, and kidney infections.
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Ibn Sina, who was a physician whose name is known in the West as Avicenna, was perhaps the greatest of all the medieval Arab physicians.

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Ibn Sina, known in the West as Avicenna, was perhaps the greatest medieval Arab physician.
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His book Canon of Medicine was a publication that was still being consulted by doctors in the nineteenth century.

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His book Canon of Medicine was still being consulted by doctors in the nineteenth century.
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Modern patients today have many reasons to feel that they owe a debt of gratitude to these medieval Islamic scholars.

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Patients today have many reasons to be grateful to these medieval Islamic scholars.
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