EXERCISE S7–3 Sentence variety

EXERCISE S7–3Sentence variety

Examine the draft and the revision of each sentence. Identify the technique that was used to improve sentence variety.

Example

1 of 5

Draft: The Dust Bowl farmers, looking wearily into the cameras of US government photographers, represented the harshest effects of the Great Depression.

Revision: Looking wearily into the cameras of US government photographers, the Dust Bowl farmers represented the harshest effects of the Great Depression.

Question

EXERCISE S7–3 Sentence variety - 1 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

2 of 5

Draft: The Trans Alaska Pipeline was completed in 1977. It has moved more than fifteen billion barrels of oil since 1977.

Revision: Since it was completed in 1977, the Trans Alaska Pipeline has moved more than fifteen billion barrels of oil.

Question

EXERCISE S7–3 Sentence variety - 2 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

3 of 5

Draft: Mr. Guo habitually dresses in loose clothing and canvas shoes for his wushu workout.

Revision: Habitually, Mr. Guo dresses in loose clothing and canvas shoes for his wushu workout.

Question

EXERCISE S7–3 Sentence variety - 3 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

4 of 5

Draft: A number of obstacles are strategically placed throughout a firefighter training maze.

Revision: Strategically placed throughout a firefighter training maze are a number of obstacles.

Question

EXERCISE S7–3 Sentence variety - 4 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?

5 of 5

Draft: Ian McKellen is a British actor who made his debut in 1961 and was knighted in 1991, and he played Gandalf in the movie trilogy The Lord of the Rings.

Revision: Ian McKellen, a British actor, made his debut in 1961, was knighted in 1991, and played Gandalf in the movie trilogy The Lord of the Rings.

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EXERCISE S7–3 Sentence variety - 5 of 5: Which revision strategy was used?