G6-d: Revision by restructuring

G6-dConsider restructuring the sentence, perhaps by subordinating one of the clauses.

If one of the independent clauses is less important than the other, turn the less important clause into a subordinate clause or phrase. (For more about subordination, see S6, especially the final chart in S6-b.)

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Minor ideas in these sentences are now expressed in subordinate clauses or phrases.