EXERCISE W4–1 Jargon, pretentious language, euphemism

EXERCISE W4-1Jargon, pretentious language, euphemism

Edit the following sentences to eliminate jargon, pretentious or flowery language, euphemisms, and doublespeak. You may need to make substantial changes in some sentences. Type your answers in the boxes below.

Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.)

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In my youth, my family was under the constraints of difficult financial circumstances.

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Suggested revision: When I was young, my family was poor.
EXERCISE 17-1 Jargon, pretentious language, euphemisms - Edit the following sentences to eliminate jargon, pretentious or flowery language, euphemisms, and doublespeak. You may need to make substantial changes in some sentences. Type your answers in the boxes below. Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.) - In my youth, my family was under the constraints of difficult financial circumstances.

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In order that I may increase my expertise in the area of delivery of services to clients, I feel that participation in this conference will be beneficial.

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Suggested revision: This conference will help me serve my clients better.
EXERCISE 17-1 Jargon, pretentious language, euphemisms - Edit the following sentences to eliminate jargon, pretentious or flowery language, euphemisms, and doublespeak. You may need to make substantial changes in some sentences. Type your answers in the boxes below. Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.) - In order that I may increase my expertise in the area of delivery of services to clients, I feel that participation in this conference will be beneficial.

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The prophetic meteorologist cautioned the general populace regarding the possible deleterious effects of the impending tempest.

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Suggested revision: The meteorologist warned the public about the possible dangers of the coming storm.
EXERCISE 17-1 Jargon, pretentious language, euphemisms - Edit the following sentences to eliminate jargon, pretentious or flowery language, euphemisms, and doublespeak. You may need to make substantial changes in some sentences. Type your answers in the boxes below. Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.) - The prophetic meteorologist cautioned the general populace regarding the possible deleterious effects of the impending tempest.

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Governmentally sanctioned investigations into the continued value of after-school programs indicate a perceived need in the public realm at large.

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Suggested revision: Government studies show a need for after-school programs.
EXERCISE 17-1 Jargon, pretentious language, euphemisms - Edit the following sentences to eliminate jargon, pretentious or flowery language, euphemisms, and doublespeak. You may need to make substantial changes in some sentences. Type your answers in the boxes below. Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.) - Governmentally sanctioned investigations into the continued value of after-school programs indicate a perceived need in the public realm at large.

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Passengers should endeavor to finalize the customs declaration form prior to exiting the aircraft.

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Suggested revision: Passengers should try to complete the customs declaration form before leaving the plane.
EXERCISE 17-1 Jargon, pretentious language, euphemisms - Edit the following sentences to eliminate jargon, pretentious or flowery language, euphemisms, and doublespeak. You may need to make substantial changes in some sentences. Type your answers in the boxes below. Click Submit after each question to see feedback and to record your answer. After you have finished every question, your answers will be submitted to your instructor’s gradebook. You may review your answers by returning to the exercise at any time. (An exercise reports to the gradebook only if your instructor has assigned it.) - Passengers should endeavor to finalize the customs declaration form prior to exiting the aircraft.