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Revising for Conciseness and Simplicity

The following passage is from a request for proposals published by the National Science Foundation. (Sentence numbers have been added here.) The questions below ask you to think about word choice (as discussed in “Choosing the Right Words and Phrases”).

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Source: National Science Foundation, 2008: www.nsf.gov/pubs/policydocs/pappguide/nsf08_1/gpg_1.jsp#IA1.

Question 6.1

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Question 6.2

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Question 6.3

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