Stating and Using a Thesis

Most pieces of effective writing are unified around one main point. That is, all the subpoints and supporting details are relevant to that point. Generally, after you have read an essay, you can sum up the writer’s main point in a sentence, even if the author has not stated it explicitly. We call this summary statement a thesis.

Explicit Thesis. Often a thesis will be explicit, plainly stated, in the selection itself. In “The Myth of the Latin Woman: I Just Met a Girl Named María” from The Latin Deli (University of Georgia Press, 1993), Judith Ortiz Cofer states her thesis at the end of the first paragraph: “You can leave the Island, master the English language, and travel as far as you can, but if you are a Latina, especially one like me who so obviously belongs to Rita Moreno’s gene pool, the Island travels with you.” This clear statement, strategically placed, helps readers see her point.

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Implicit Thesis. Sometimes a thesis is implicit, indirectly suggested rather than directly stated. In “The Niceness Solution,” a selection from Bruce Bawer’s Beyond Queer (Free Press, 1996), Paul Varnell describes an ordinance “banning rude behavior, including rude speech,” passed in Raritan, New Jersey. After discussing a 1580 code of conduct, he identifies four objections to such attempts to limit free speech. He concludes with this sentence: “Sensibly, Raritan Police Chief Joseph Sferro said he would not enforce the new ordinance.” Although Varnell does not state his main point in one concise sentence, readers know that he opposes the Raritan law and any other attempts to legislate “niceness.”

The purpose of most academic and workplace writing is to inform, to explain, or to convince. To achieve any of these purposes, you must make your main point crystal clear. A thesis sentence helps you clarify your idea and stay on track as you write. It also helps your readers see your point and follow your discussion. Sometimes you may want to imply your thesis, but if you state it explicitly, you ensure that readers cannot miss it.

If you select the essays yourself, choose them from Chs. 4–12.

Learning by Doing Identifying Theses

Learning by Doingimage Identifying Theses

Working in a small group, select and read five essays from this book (or read those your instructor has chosen). Then, individually, write out thesis for each essay. Some thesis statements are stated outright (explicit), but others are indirect (implicit). Compare and contrast thesis statements you identified with those your classmates found. How do you account for differences? Try to agree on a thesis statement for each essay.

How to Discover a Working Thesis

In Chs. 4–12, look for specific advice under headings that mention a thesis and for thesis Checklists. Also, watch for the red labels that identify thesis examples.

It’s rare for a writer to develop a perfect thesis statement early in the writing process and then to write an effective essay that fits it exactly. What you should aim for is a working thesis—a statement that can guide you but that you will ultimately refine. Ideas for a working thesis are probably all around you.

Your topic identifies the area you want to explore. To convert a topic to a thesis, you need to add your own slant, attitude, or point. A useful thesis contains not only the key words that identify your topic but also the point you want to make or the attitude you intend to express.

Topic + Slant or Attitude or Point = Working Thesis

Suppose you want to identify and write about a specific societal change.

TOPIC IDEA old-fashioned formal courtesy
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Now you experiment, testing ideas to make the topic your own.

TRIAL Old-fashioned formal courtesy is a thing of the past.

Although your trial sentence emphasizes change, it’s still circular, repeating rather than advancing a workable point. It doesn’t say anything new about old-fashioned formal courtesy; it simply defines old-fashioned. You still need to state your own slant—maybe why things have changed.

TOPIC IDEA + SLANT old-fashioned formal courtesy + its decline as gender roles have changed
WORKING THESIS As the roles of men and women have changed in our society, old-fashioned formal courtesy has declined.

For advice about revising a thesis, see Re-viewing and Revising in Ch. 23.

With this working thesis, you could focus on how changing societal attitudes toward gender roles have caused changes in courtesy. Later, when you revise, you may refine your thesis further—perhaps restricting it to courtesy toward the elderly, toward women, or, despite stereotypes, toward men. The chart under "How to State a Thesis" suggests ways to develop a working thesis.

Once you have a working thesis, be sure its point accomplishes the purpose of your assignment. Suppose your assignment asks you to compare and contrast two local newspapers’ coverage of a Senate election. Ask yourself what the point of that comparison and contrast is. Simply noting a difference won’t be enough to satisfy most readers.

NO SPECIFIC POINT The Herald’s coverage of the Senate elections was different from the Courier’s.
WORKING THESIS The Herald’s coverage of the Senate elections was more thorough than the Courier’s.

Learning by Doing Discovering a Thesis

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Write a sentence, a working thesis, that unifies each of the following groups of details. Then compare and contrast your theses with those of your classmates. What other information would you need to write a good paper on each topic? How might thesis statement change as you write the paper?

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  1. Recycling reduces waste and saves space in landfills.

    Recycling reduces air and water pollution.

    Recycling reduces our impact on forests, wetlands, and other homes for wildlife.

    Manufacturing with recycled material saves energy.

    Recycling programs create jobs.

  2. Voter turnout among 18- to 25-year-olds is relatively low.

    Because of this low turnout, young people’s interests may be underrepresented.

    Voting, and other political involvement, can make a difference.

    Young people who vote for civic leaders can help make sure that government truly represents their interests.

    Young people who vote on policy issues can help shape a better future for themselves and others.

How to State a Thesis

Once you have a notion of a topic and main point, use these pointers to state or improve a thesis to guide your planning and drafting.

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For more on revising a thesis, see Re-viewing and Revising in Ch. 23.

If the suggestions in this chapter have helped you draft a working thesis—even an awkward or feeble one—you’ll find plenty of advice about improving it in the next few pages and more later about revising it. But what if you’re freezing up because your thesis simply won’t take shape? First, relax. Your thesis will emerge later on—as your thinking matures and you figure out your paper’s true direction, as peer readers spot the idea in your paper you’re too close to see, as you talk with your instructor and suddenly grasp how to take your paper where you want it to go. In the meantime, plan and write so that you create a rich environment that will encourage your thesis to emerge.

Learning by Doing Examining Thesis Statements

Learning by Doingimage Examining Thesis Statements

You have been assigned an essay of one thousand words (approximately four double-spaced pages). Review the following thesis statements:

  1. Violence in television shows or movies can be harmful to children.

  2. Students have developed a variety of techniques to conceal inadequate study from their instructors.

  3. I don’t know how to cook.

  4. Volunteering at a women’s shelter gave me an inside look at the consequences of domestic abuse, and I learned how to incorporate volunteer work into my busy schedule.

  5. Trophy hunting of animals should be outlawed.

  6. No war is a just war.

  7. The government’s “war on drugs” is a failure.

With your classmates, discuss each thesis statement and answer the following questions:

  • Is thesis stated clearly?

  • Does thesis state just one idea?

  • Is thesis stated positively?

  • Is thesis sufficiently limited for an essay of this size?

  • Is thesis too broad or too narrow?

  • Is thesis debatable?

  • How might thesis be improved?

How to Improve a Thesis

Simply knowing what a solid working thesis should do may not help you improve your thesis. Whether yours is a first effort or a refined version, turn to the Take Action chart to help you figure out how to improve your thesis. Skim down the left-hand column to identify questions you might ask about your working thesis. When you answer a question with “Yes” or “Maybe,” move straight across to Locate Specifics for that question. Use the activities there to pinpoint gaps, problems, or weaknesses. Then move across to Take Action. Use the advice that suits your problem as you revise.

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Take Action Building a Stronger Thesis

Ask each question listed in the left-hand column of the chart to consider whether your draft might need work on that issue. If so, follow the ASK—LOCATE SPECIFICS—TAKE ACTION sequence to revise.

1 ASK 2 LOCATE SPECIFICS 3 TAKE ACTION
Could I define or state my topic more clearly?
  • Write out your current working thesis.

  • Circle the words in it that identify your topic.

WORKING THESIS: Adaptability is essential for World Action volunteers. [What, exactly, does the topic adaptability mean?]

  • Rework the circled topic. State it more clearly, and specify what it means to you.

  • Define or identify the topic in terms of your purpose and the likely interests of your audience.

REVISED THESIS: An ability to adjust to, even thrive under, challenging circumstances is essential for World Action volunteers.

Could I define or state my slant more clearly?
  • Write out your current working thesis.

  • Underline the words that state your slant, attitude, or point about your topic.

WORKING THESIS: Volunteering is an invaluable experience. [Why or in what ways is volunteering invaluable?]

  • Rework your underlined slant. Jot down ideas to sharpen it and express an engaging approach to your topic.

  • Refine it to accomplish your purpose and appeal to your audience.

REVISED THESIS: Volunteering builds practical skills while connecting volunteers more fully to their communities.

Could I limit my thesis to develop it more successfully?
  • Write out your current working thesis.

  • Decide whether it establishes a task that you could accomplish given the available time and the expected length.

WORKING THESIS: Rock and roll has evolved dramatically since the 1950s. [Tracing this history in a few pages would be impossible.]

  • Restrict your thesis to a slice of the pie, not the whole pie.

  • Focus on one part or element, not several. Break it apart, and pick only a chunk.

  • Reduce many ideas to one point, or convert a negative statement to a positive one.

REVISED THESIS: The music of the alternative-rock band Wilco continues to evolve as members experiment with vocal moods and instrumentation.

How to Use a Thesis to Organize

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For more on using a thesis to develop an outline, see Organizing Your Ideas.

Often a good, clear thesis will suggest an organization for your ideas.

WORKING THESIS Despite the disadvantages of living in a downtown business district, I wouldn’t live anywhere else.
FIRST ¶S Disadvantages of living in the business district
NEXT ¶S Advantages of living there
LAST ¶ Affirmation of your preference for downtown life

Just putting your working thesis into words can help organize you and keep you on track. A clear thesis can guide you as you select details and connect sections of the essay.

For more on key terms in college assignments, see A Process of Critical Thinking in Ch. 3 and Learning from Another Writer: Essay Exam in Ch. 16.

In addition, your thesis can prepare your readers for the pattern of development or sequence of ideas that you plan to present. As a writer, you look for key words (such as compare, propose, or evaluate) when you size up an assignment. Such words alert you to what’s expected. When you write or revise your thesis, you can use such terms or their equivalents (such as benefit or consequence instead of effect) to preview for readers the likely direction of your paper. Then they, too, will know what to expect.

WORKING THESIS Expanding the campus program for energy conservation would bring welcome financial and environmental benefits.
FIRST ¶S Explanation of the campus energy situation
NEXT ¶S Justification of the need for the proposed expansion
NEXT ¶S Financial benefits for the college and students
NEXT ¶S Environmental benefits for the region and beyond
LAST ¶ Concluding assertion of the value of the expansion

As you write, however, you don’t have to cling to a thesis for dear life. If further investigation changes your thinking, you can change your thesis.

WORKING THESIS Because wolves are a menace to people and farm animals, they ought to be exterminated.
REVISED THESIS The wolf, a relatively peaceful animal useful in nature’s scheme of things, ought to be protected.

You can restate a thesis any time: as you write, revise, or revise again.

Learning by Doing Using a Thesis to Preview

Learning by Doingimage Using a Thesis to Preview

Each of the following thesis statements is from a student paper in a different field. With your classmates, consider how each one previews the essay to come and how you would expect the essay to be organized into sections.

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  1. Although the intent of inclusion is to provide the best care for all children by treating both special- and general-education students equally, some people in the field believe that the full inclusion of disabled children in mainstream classrooms may not be in the best interest of either type of student. (From “Is Inclusion the Answer?” by Sarah E. Goers)

  2. With ancient Asian roots and contemporary European influences, the Japanese language has continued to change and to reflect cultural change as well. (From “Japanese: Linguistic Diversity” by Stephanie Hawkins)

  3. Manifest destiny was an expression by leaders and politicians in the 1840s to clarify continental extension and expansion and in a sense revitalize the mission and national destiny for Americans. (From ethnic studies examination answer by Angela Mendy)

  4. By comparing the Aeneid with Troilus and Criseyde, one can easily see the effects of the code of courtly love on literature. (From “The Effect of the Code of Courtly Love: A Comparison of Virgil’s Aeneid and Chaucer’s Troilus and Criseyde” by Cindy Keeler)

  5. The effects of pollutants on the endangered Least Tern entering the Upper Newport Bay should be quantified so that necessary action can be taken to further protect and encourage the species. (From “Contaminant Residues in Least Tern [Sterna antillarum] Eggs Nesting in Upper Newport Bay” by Susanna Olsen)