Wordy sentences 4

Edit each sentence to eliminate wordiness. Before working the exercise, read the example, which is the first sentence in the paragraph from which the sentences are taken.

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On June 26, 2000, two groups of scientists announced a breakthrough in the science of genetics.

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On June 26, 2000, two groups of scientists announced a breakthrough in genetics.
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The scientists, representing teams from organizations that are known as the Human Genome Project and Celera Genomics, had deciphered the human genome.

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The scientists, representing teams from the Human Genome Project and Celera Genomics, had deciphered the human genome.
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Every individual person inherits from each of his or her parents half of a genome, a set of instructions defining a human being.

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Every person inherits from each parent half of a genome, a set of instructions defining a human being.
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The publicly funded Human Genome Project originally began a genome map in 1990.

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The publicly funded Human Genome Project began a genome map in 1990.
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In 1998, scientists at Celera Genomics, a private corporation, began racing the Human Genome Project team in a competition to see who could finish the genome map first.

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In 1998, scientists at Celera Genomics, a private corporation, began racing the Human Genome Project team to see who could finish the genome map first.
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When each group had finished part of the map, the scientists combined the pieces together, completing the genome.

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When each group had finished part of the map, the scientists combined the pieces, completing the genome.
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There are many gains that scientists expect from the genome breakthrough.

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Scientists expect many gains from the genome breakthrough.
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Genetic information will provide benefits for people at risk of developing genetic diseases.

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Genetic information will benefit people at risk of developing genetic diseases.
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The genome map may help biologists learn how specific genes have an effect on the body.

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The genome map may help biologists learn how specific genes affect the body.
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There are many details that still need to be added to the genome map, but the completed outline is cause for celebration.

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Many details still need to be added to the genome map, but the completed outline is cause for celebration.
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